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I think a couple of words might have gone missing or something. Missing an endquote in the first paragraph.
This sentence puzzles me: "He never hit me though I know that he had been." I think you dropped a word but I can't fathom whether that word is 'drunk' or something else.
One or two typos: "sun" should be "sum".
Naturally the typos etc are secondary criticism to the value of the work. For this I have no criticism.
I'm interested in seeing the next piece. It seems pretty good so far.
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